My response to "The Four Seasons"

This is the note I wrote to the author of "The Four Seasons." Before writing, I marked the paper for small grammatical/spelling/syntax errors that I assumed the student would see for himself. I found it a bit difficult to critique since we are given a final draft, so I kept it short and focused on what I thought was important.

You do a great job of including small details about the seasons that make the imagery in your paper strong. Why do you capitalize the names of the seasons? If you choose to write another draft, focus on how the seasons have affected you personally. What are some experiences of your own that make them special to you?  Let me suggest that you revisit correct use of commas where noted. If you have any questions about notation or if anything is unclear, please consult with me.